Hello and welcome back to JaeBDub Music + Entertainment. Today I've started a new tab in my blog dedicated to user sought reviews by, well who other than me, JaeBDub. Alright since this if the first time I've done something like this on my blog, we should take the time to make sure it's organized, makes sense, and hopefully legible. So the thought in my head is to break into 5 sections of critique, explanation, suggestion, and yada yada. Introduction, Body, Outro, Improvements, and Encouragements. Although improvements might be mentioned during the first three sections, I will try to include overall improvements into the fourth category. This will be the fabric of my reviews from henceforth, says I!
Introduction |
The thing about introductions is they are the building blocks of your track. They are the "pillars" that a track stands upon. An intro is subjectively the most important piece of a song. That being said, if you have weak pillars, your song will crumble as soon as one stands upon it and never make it inside of the building. Instead they hit next, hoping that the next song will save them. The problem that I am seeing with this song is 75% of the intro, and I understand why you made it how you did. Leave the snare out, bass drums come in as a build up. Once the snare hits you know whats going on. Once that snare comes in at 0:48, that is the moment I'm like "Yup", now my head is bobbin', now I'm feeling it. But it took 48 seconds to get to that part. So I have two suggestions.
1. The obvious suggestion | Shorten the intro a little. Ok that was easy.
2. The less obvious suggestion | What I had in my head is cue the drums at the very beginning, lose the synth, at least for the very first bit. Cue the second stage (where bass comes in), but shorten it and I'd still say don't bring in the synth quite yet. I don't think it fits until you get to the part at 48 seconds. You know the pause you have right before that part, it would make perfect sense for everything to come in right there. It'll make everyone go OH SHIZZZ! I promise. So I'll try to make this into a visual of some sort... Well I actually went back to take a listen before I wrote this part, is that a reverb on the percussion? I think that might be the problem that I'm hearing. It makes it sound like the song is bouncing from here to there, and I can't quite focus on it because it's such a spazz that won't sit still. It'll be ok to calm down the intro a bit, which is why I like the part at 48 seconds so much. It compresses the song, so I'm not jumping from the left to right speaker trying to find the noises.
3. The where did this come from suggestion | Calm your noises down a little bit, instead of the electronic noises hitting every 4 bars, make it one or two. Example - hit, hit, hit, stop. I think this works for a lot of electronic music. The bars just become overwhelming when you have the same glitch noise going 4 bars 24/7. Try it out, let me know.
The Body |
The only problem I have with the body of the song, is the lack of a true breakdown. I love breakdowns, they break repetition, they add flavor, and they make a track have more dynamic. I heard you try to have somewhat of a breakdown, where the bass goes into the... idk what to call it... teeter totter kind of bass. The thing is I like when the bass fades away for a little while. Bring back in part of your intro, or have a synth breakdown, something original and interesting.
The Outro |
My favorite part of the song, and I wish that the synth brought in appeared more in your track. It could fit perfectly in the intro somewhere, instead of the spazzy glitch noises. Once again I only have one problem with this part, and it's that the song ends abruptly. This is easily fixable, just add a fade. Put another 4 bars in and fade those 4 until it's silent, easy as pie. Or come up with a more original way, but still I would fix it.
Improvements |
1. Intro
2. Synths
3. Breakdown
4. Outro
5. Mastering
6. Get that shizz in 1080p son!
7. Possibly try speeding up the track, I understand why it's mellow, but in my head I can hear it being 3-5 bpm faster and sounding amazing. The thing is it might conflict with your intro, but the body would sound amazing! I was also a little surprised based on the intro, how mellow the tempo of the drop was. Try it out, you might find you hate it because it sounds different than you are used to but keep two copies and see if it grows on you. Also, send me one!
8. Instead of the bassline going 2 notes this pitch, 2 notes that pitch, repeat. Try 2 notes this pitch, pause, 1 note that pitch or something. Would be interesting to hear. Somewhat like the part at 2:00, which only lasts for a short time.
Encouragements |
I really enjoy the tunes you are making. Keep up the good work and everything will flow smoother so you can integrate all those ideas I see you have. You have a unique style, which is something that everyone can dig. Send me anything new you make and I'll give you opinions. Not to sound like a broken record, but keep it up! I'll stay posted, peace out.
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